Debbie Moon at 2012-12-20 18:08:36:
"Challenge accepted!"
SusetteSoparia at 2012-12-20 18:51:01:
On the day of her 1st century B-day party, Liv discovers losing her virginity would be her All American dream; but when she follows an astronaut to Texas, she must decide if breaking the written law of "Population Control" is worth becoming a criminal.
reuben_whakamoe at 2012-12-20 19:10:43:
One more, because Franklin and Scott are getting off on it and its Christmas.. "A ghetto death government must suddenly teach their new boss after a mystery exchange uses their first search for order as a backdrop for successful american friendship in an unlikely public war."
Jason Young at 2012-12-20 19:27:51:
In an apocalyptic near-future, with the population of Earth reduced to one, SAM PLAN, a desperate, brilliant exchange student stranded alone in Texas, must devise a way to go back in time to lose his virginity.
bluebludgardenr at 2012-12-20 19:46:51:
In the future, two men and one woman decide to leave Earth after the planet's population reaches a tipping point. This screenplay is currently in development. Please don't steal it. Thanks.
achamings at 2012-12-20 20:02:55:
An struggling Man o' War is sent to an old English village, where he must run for sheriff. He soon discovers that the ruthless old farm lord, Sam Black, wants to make a shocking and desperate deal. @AndrewChamings
Shaula Evans at 2012-12-20 20:08:44:
Too much fun! When an retired crime boss loses his home to a ruthless woman bank worker, he enlists three ex-con friends in an old school conspiracy to rob the bank in revenge.
kellisays@gmail.com at 2012-12-20 20:26:35:
After their entire high school goes missing, a group of students enlist their families help in searching for their friends and stopping the corrupt former sheriff’s conspiracy to rid the town of teenagers.
Teddy Pasternak at 2012-12-20 20:27:09:
When a young slave boy is murdered by a ruthless farm owner, a teenage sheriff and a team of dangerous ex-cons must work together to uncover a criminal conspiracy and restore law and order to a corrupt Texas town.
Shaula Evans at 2012-12-20 20:36:28:
After a well-loved sherrif's shocking death, his brother takes over his job and marries the sheriff's wife, but her dangerous teenage son will stop at nothing to get to the bottom of the conspiracy. (A wild west Hamlet, from the POV of Claudius)
American Jetsetters at 2012-12-20 20:51:28:
Sam, a young American woman working in Tokyo, must take on the ruthless and corrupt Yakuza in order to save her teenage sister from a false criminal conviction.
hadlex at 2012-12-20 21:15:39:
On a journey to save a dying star, three astronauts discover an old box sent from the future and together they must protect its shocking secret.
reuben_whakamoe at 2012-12-20 21:24:39:
A missing acting star women discovers a high village while trying to find a centurys old dangeous self school which causes the death of her friends father and sparks a ruthless forced war with the english government.
Shaula Evans at 2012-12-20 21:27:40:
When a corrupt government abandons the last ghetto in a dying solar system, a desperate father forces a dangerous ex-astronaut to help their struggling group escape on a journey to find a new home.
American Jetsetters at 2012-12-20 21:42:11:
This is actually a useful exercise for sharpening up your already existing log lines. I just took one I already had, incorporated 11 words from the cloud, and made it much punchier! Might try this with all of them ;) Thanks Scott!
Scott at 2012-12-20 21:46:10:
Remember you have until Friday, December 21 at midnight Pacific to post your loglines. 5 winners announced on Sunday, December 23rd with comments from Max Millimeter. So keep 'em coming! But remember you have to use some of the key words from the Black List 2012 word cloud as the basis of your logline.
FatLadiesMan at 2012-12-20 22:18:07:
Hitler is forced to become an ex-con love slave, violently losing his behind virginity to a ruthless black man. Every word over two letters is from the #blwordcloud. This is your own fault!
churnage at 2012-12-20 22:23:46:
An ex-con black astronaut and a corrupt sheriff join forces to unravel a shocking government conspiracy about a secret criminal family.
Timothy Visentin at 2012-12-20 22:29:41:
"An escaped ex-con and two teenage boys are forced to protect the people of their town inside their high school, after the entire country is overrun when the government falls during a losing war."
Shaula Evans at 2012-12-20 22:33:10:
When a bank worker discovers his wife dead in their home, he has one night to unravel the mystery of her shocking past in order to clear his name--with a corrupt sherrif hot on his trail. When war breaks out between two English villages, the women make a plan to force the men to stop fighting: the Virginity Conspiracy. When a young man discovers his ex girlfriend is marrying a dangerous criminal, he's forced to choose between protecting her and losing her friendship. An escaped criminal must protect a small town from a bank conspiracy--by robbing the government to pay back the banks. When a young English Lord falls in love with an American exchange student, her ruthless ex-con brother forces him to reveal shocking government secrets. When a left-wing American government shocks the world by stopping war, one man leads a conspiracy of ruthless military-industrial bosses to disrupt the new order and return to the profitable status quo.
Teddy Pasternak at 2012-12-20 22:41:11:
"The Virginity Conspiracy" LOL!
nicolemsaad at 2012-12-20 22:50:45:
Here goes! A French family, desperate to survive Hitler’s ruthless war, starts a drug trading business in their underground bunker.
SaradeWaard1 at 2012-12-20 22:51:36:
When his struggling daughter's public high school teachers go work-to-rule, an ex-con, single-father crosses the picket line, desperate to make stars out of the losing debate team from the ghetto.
plinytheelder_t at 2012-12-20 23:00:58:
A Texas farm boy desperate to escape his mundane life finds love and loses his virginity to an ex-con's daughter, only for things to go awry when he discovers her dangerous and shocking plan to murder the corrupt sheriff who caused her father's death.
Shaula Evans at 2012-12-20 23:04:06:
You know, I spent my childhood playing story and word games like this, and now my husband and I have had a great evening playing with the tag cloud. Thanks, Scott and Leonard. (All I have to do is say "corrupt astronaut to my husband now and he falls down laughing.) An English Lord, a drug lord, and a worker in the House of the Lord band together in a desperate plan to save the village's only public house. (Working title: Three Lords Walk Into A Bar)
plinytheelder_t at 2012-12-20 23:21:40:
An astronaut and ex-con with an unlikely friendship must stop a government conspiracy to start a war after the government secretly hides Hitler's dying son on a Texas farm, only to discover that the village's corrupt sheriff has a ruthless plan of his own.
Michel Hulsey at 2012-12-20 23:26:46:
I want to see this movie! In the former American state, Texas, a dying sheriff is forced to find and murder Hitler's missing daughter in a conspiracy to protect a dangerous secret.
Kenneth Kleemann at 2012-12-20 23:45:50:
The shocking true story of a man who discovers his girlfriend is Hitler.
Kenneth Kleemann at 2012-12-20 23:52:21:
And since I'm replying to myself, my script is: https://www.blcklst.com/members/script/4237
Teddy Pasternak at 2012-12-20 23:57:00:
FIRST DAUGHTER When teenager Sam Ross discovers she might not be the President's daughter after all, she sets out on an unlikely journey to find out who her real father is, chased by her successful family, the secret service, corrupt government officials, struggling cops, high ex-cons, her dead boss, three escaped farm animals, an old drug lord, a team of criminals, a sheriff's wife and Adolf Hitler, Jr., all the while really desperate to lose her virginity to her black astronaut boyfriend and achieving her dangerous dream of teaching American English to dying students at a ruthless Texas party school.
Holly Bell at 2012-12-21 00:25:22:
Two English exchange students, from crime families at war together for a century, discover love at American school and must keep their love a secret when get home. My friend Bill helped with this one.
vVvRapture at 2012-12-21 00:35:45:
Written in the lost archives of a young George Washington, the lost son of the father of the United States of America dives into a desperate, yet undeniably American adventure alongside the daughter of Benjamin Franklin to discover the truth behind a shocking exchange between the Hitler family and an underground militia in Texas that threatened to corrupt the very virginity of the newborn nation.
EyeMTheWalrus at 2012-12-21 00:51:22:
A sheriff's daughter discovers young love when a teenage Hitler journeys to her Texas town as an exchange student -- Title: "Mein Boyfriend"
plinytheelder_t at 2012-12-21 00:54:19:
heh.
Shaula Evans at 2012-12-21 00:56:46:
My hat goes off to you, Teddy. I stand in awe of this feat of writing brilliance.
Pj McIlvaine at 2012-12-21 01:16:20:
Based on a true story, a Texas father forms an unlikely alliance with his teenage daughter's ex-boyfriend to stop her from losing her virginity to a dangerous black ex-con from the future determined to uncover a shocking, secret government conspiracy regarding time travel that if left unchecked will bring Hitler back from the dead and allow him to win World War II.
Thomas Benedikt at 2012-12-21 01:34:03:
A young Hitler discovers his English high school friend, Sam, is really an American astronaut sent from the future to teach him about life, love and friendship. (17 key words used)
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 02:01:58:
o_O
KBotts at 2012-12-21 02:24:24:
MY HIGH SCHOOL FAMILY After a mystery box takes his virginity, Sam discovers he's a teenage father to an entire village of foreign exchange students. Based on a true story.
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 02:55:45:
When a secret, government, time-travel plan goes awry, a European soldier is transported from the trenches of WWI to 1970s America, where he finds himself on the drug farm of a corrupt, Texas sheriff and discovers peace, love, and LSD. Having escaped a dangerous life of war, he is content to stay high and live out his boyhood dream of being a successful painter. But his new life is threatened by the arrival of an astronaut sent from the future to fix the space-time continuum by forcing him to go home to face his destiny - as leader of the Third Reich. (Working Title: New Order)
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 03:00:33:
Since everyone is on this thread now, should we copy/paste our other entries?
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 03:17:32:
The son of a former sheriff and the young daughter of a successful, crime-syndicate family become unlikely lovers after they both witness a murder during a robbery gone wrong. In order to protect their love, and with tensions running high on both sides, the teenagers decide to run away together in the middle of the night - only to discover that someone wants them dead.
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 03:21:11:
This would be epic.
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 03:46:59:
I love this one.
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 03:49:09:
You are really clever, Shaula. All of yours have been great! And kudos on the creative use of the word "school".
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 03:51:00:
It's too hard to comment on everyone's. So many good ones. But I really like this one. I love a classic redux, and this one has a lot of intrigue.
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 03:51:24:
I would love to see this.
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 03:52:33:
This is so good! Gave me chills.
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 03:55:35:
O.O
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 03:57:14:
Ditto.
darrenFin at 2012-12-21 05:21:03:
WOKE UP THIS MORNIN' When a rich exchange student suspects his fiancé is part of a crime family, he hires an ex-con turned struggling actor, whose misguided efforts draw the attention of the government.
Debbie Moon at 2012-12-21 05:34:13:
A struggling Texas sheriff must help his ruthless ex-con father rob the town bank to pay back a drug lord… A young black astronaut goes on a journey through time to find a missing woman and protect a government conspiracy. But when he finds her, will their love corrupt the future, or save it? 1859: a desperate young family and their freed slave go to war against the government to protect their farm – and discover a shocking conspiracy to prevent the Civil War…
churnage at 2012-12-21 05:40:24:
This is fun... When a struggling criminal loses his virginity to an ex-con's teenage daughter, he embarks on a desperate journey to find his missing father, a corrupt Texas astronaut missing since he revealed a secret government conspiracy to create a dangerous new drug with Hitler's DNA.
reuben_whakamoe at 2012-12-21 07:40:26:
& scene... "After many nights sent following the single daughter of the mayor of a corrupt town her young boyfriend tries the unlikely "true virginity star" deal via a public death pact as an alternative to the going it alone plan but finds his girlfriend robbing his life while he runs from his self.
churnage at 2012-12-21 07:50:37:
Population Party After an ex-con known as Black Hitler and a teenage astronaut get high on a secret government drug, they concoct a desperate plan to save a Texas town from forced virginity, building a "love" school in a former ghetto bank, but things go awry when a sturggling exchange student and a corrupt sheriff's daughter party mistakenly with a ruthless village cop, whose young wife is missing.
churnage at 2012-12-21 07:58:52:
TP, kudos. Sounds like an updated version of "It's A Mad, Mad, Mad World" crossed with "Road Trip" & "The Sure Thing." Might have something there.
PitchieG at 2012-12-21 10:04:25:
As a promise to his dying father, a young English Lord is forced to live in American ghetto to search for his missing future wife. Genre: RomCom
wlubake at 2012-12-21 10:37:43:
Based on a true American story, when an ex-con discovers the shocking truth that his brother’s daughter’s boyfriend has become the boss at the center of a secret conspiracy to save Hitler’s long lost son, the man must team with two young teenage boys from the local high school and a Texas sheriff in order to stop the ruthless boyfriend’s plan before his family is ultimately mistaken by the government for criminals working to start a new war with the English.
Teddy Pasternak at 2012-12-21 10:57:56:
Thanks, everyone :) This is a fun challenge.
BrowneTom at 2012-12-21 11:20:02:
A desperate, struggling, Texas Sheriff must stop a government drug farm conspiracy to save his family. #BLWordCloud
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 12:03:40:
A desperate ex-con unwittingly becomes an American hero after he protects a dying girl during a bank robbery. Struggling in his new role as an unlikely star, he finally decides to leave behind his criminal past - until he discovers that he alone can break into the government building that houses a secret, experimental drug that just might save her life.
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 12:05:21:
Another night in the ghetto, another teenage murder the cops have written off as a drug deal gone bad - until Ross the rookie discovers a small black box in the boy's hand containing a shocking secret that hints at a government conspiracy.
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 12:07:05:
When several students go missing from the local school, it is up to Sam the janitor to solve a dangerous, age-old mystery that threatens the entire population of their small, English town.
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 12:08:21:
This one's for you, Scott. ;) After discovering a secret hidden inside the ark that turned his entire regime into zombies, Hitler forms an unlikely alliance with a team of teenage vampires and a group of aliens on the run from the American government in order to save the world from an intergalactic war that threatens Earth's existence.
churnage at 2012-12-21 12:14:00:
What the hell. One more... Set in an alternate future. When the new Hitler declares a war on English virginity, an unlikely group of desperate fathers, ruthless ex-cons, and black astronauts team together to protect a village of teenage girls.
plinytheelder_t at 2012-12-21 12:51:46:
Targeted by ruthless government officials when his joke to dress as Hitler for a party goes awry, a Houston based astronaut is forced into seclusion. Desperate to avoid losing his family, he sets upon a plan to help the population of the small Texas town in which he lives, only to shockingly discover that the sheriff is a long missing and dangerous war criminal.
Shaula Evans at 2012-12-21 13:04:21:
After a small town Texas high school football team loses the grudge match of the century, the shocking discovery of the secret love between their star black player and a white girl from the other school explodes the town into a race war.
Shaula Evans at 2012-12-21 13:34:47:
January 30, 1933: following Hitler's rise to power, failed American screenwriter William Dudley Pelley launches the fascist Silver Shirts party, and sets out on a cross-country journey recruiting members and raising money in order to run for president. Based on the shocking true story of how America almost wound up with a Nazi in the White House. This one really is based on a true story (that the tag cloud doesn't do justice to). More about Pelley here in a PDF article from Syracuse University. Pelley's story is a cautionary tale well worth telling--that ends with him being charged with high treason and sedition (but the tag cloud wasn't working with me on that part). If anyone wants to run with this and write it, it's a helluva story, and you can have it with my blessing.
Bitter Script Reader at 2012-12-21 13:35:20:
The eponymous young ghetto astronaut discovers a ruthless government conspiracy to protect the virginity of teenage slave girls follow a desperate Hitler time-travel gone awry. Based on a future Texas party.
Bitter Script Reader at 2012-12-21 13:36:33:
Obviously "follow" should be "following." it's what i get for typing on my phone.
TheQuietAct at 2012-12-21 13:38:41:
SAM AND ROSS TWO DANGEROUS, ESCAPED TOY JACK-IN-A-BOX, WITH A PENCHANT TO PARTY, BEGIN A RUTHLESS JOURNEY OF ROBBING, MURDER AND ACTING. YOUNG BANK THE SHOCKING TRUE STORY OF SLAVES, SAM AND ROSS, ESCAPED FROM A MISSING TOWN, THAT THE GOVERNMENT, SECRETLY AND SUCCESSFULLY, KEPT YOUNG. SAM, ROSS AND JACK IN A BOX A TEENAGE LOVE STORY SET AGAINST THE BACKDROP OF GHETTO BOXING. THE FRIENDSHIP OF JACK AND ROSS IS TRIED BY CORRUPTION, DRUGS AND THE LOVE OF THE SAME KICK-BOXER, SAM.
Shaula Evans at 2012-12-21 13:52:50:
When a STRUGGLING TEXAS TOWN is flooded with GOVERNMENT WORKERS investigating a HIGH-profile plane crash, the NEW mayor sets up a town-wide CONSPIRACY to keep the money flowing by hiding the BLACK BOX , but when they LOSE it, the OLD mayor PLANS to blow the whistle to get his job back--if he can just find the box first.
TheQuietAct at 2012-12-21 13:58:08:
Oops where's the edit button? SAM AND ROSS TWO DANGEROUS, ESCAPED, TOY JACK-IN-A-BOXES, WITH A PENCHANT TO PARTY, BEGIN A RUTHLESS JOURNEY OF ROBBING, MURDER AND ACTING. YOUNG BANK THE SHOCKING TRUE STORY OF SLAVES, SAM AND ROSS, ESCAPED FROM A MISSING TOWN, WITH A POPULATION KEPT YOUNG, SECRETLY AND SUCCESSFULLY BY THE GOVERNMENT. SAM, ROSS AND JACK IN A BOX A TEENAGE LOVE STORY SET AGAINST THE BACKDROP OF GHETTO BOXING. THE FRIENDSHIP OF JACK AND ROSS IS TRIED BY CORRUPTION, DRUGS AND THE LOVE OF THE SAME KICK-BOXER, SAM. Ah crumbs.....
TheQuietAct at 2012-12-21 14:00:05:
Damn! I want to edit again.
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 14:07:09:
I wish there was an edit button! I like how everyone is capping the words now.
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 14:08:15:
I was wondering when someone was going to use "eponymous"! I tried but couldn't come up with something good. lol
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 14:09:42:
I have like 1000 historical events I want to write but will probably never get the time. :( I'll add this one to my list of possibilities, though. This sounds awesome!
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 14:11:12:
This sounds great! And I don't think anyone has done sports yet. Good job.
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 14:14:15:
I just wanted to say that I am really enjoying all of these from everybody. I'm trying not to comment on everyone so I don't flood people's inboxes too much.
Shaula Evans at 2012-12-21 14:26:16:
I second that, Kristen. I want to comment on all of them but I feel like I'm flooding your inboxes enough with my loglines already! Say folks, if you're enjoying playing with loglines, we have a Logline Workshop over at the GOYOQ forum (it's only visible once you log in)--if the community put a fraction of the energy I'm seeing here into helping each other polish up loglines, we'd all be doing better at pitching our scripts. If you'd like some help with your own (real) logline, or if you'd like to help other people out, please drop by. (Kristen! I'm looking at you!) And speaking of loglines... When an ESCAPED EX-CON who found the LORD on DEATH row goes on a JOURNEY of redemption, he has ONE day to make amends with the FAMILIES of his THREE victims (I assume "lord" wound up in the tag cloud via "drug lord", but I'm having fun trying to use the words in less obvious ways.)
BillieJeanVK at 2012-12-21 14:45:00:
In a shocking turn of events a desperate single woman takes a ruthless sheriff as her slave in a conspiracy to make him less Hitler and more boyfriend.
plinytheelder_t at 2012-12-21 14:46:02:
But this is what happens when you add "incentives".
BillieJeanVK at 2012-12-21 14:52:55:
Based on the true story of a black astronaut, a man decides to be a student, gets a girlfriend who becomes his wife, then joins a government conspiracy to go into go into space where nothing goes awry.
Shaula Evans at 2012-12-21 15:25:17:
People are writing, and thinking about loglines, and thinking about premises... I'm not sure how one could pull off some of these as movies, but anything that gets people thinking and writing gets my support.
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 15:29:08:
I'd be happy to participate! :)
Erica R Maier at 2012-12-21 16:04:53:
An exchange student discovers a ruthless American government deal and must protect the public from the corrupt party.
ChrisWWW at 2012-12-21 16:30:37:
A TEENAGE BOY, STRUGGLING at HIGH SCHOOL, DISCOVERs his FATHER, a SUCCESSFUL BOSS of a large PUBLIC BANK, is having an affair with the WIFE of a CORRUPT GOVERNMENT official, and TOGETHER with THREE of his RUTHLESS STUDENT FRIENDS, DECIDE to PLAN an ULTIMATELY DANGEROUS and SHOCKING DEAL, in EXCHANGE for keeping their LOVE a SECRET.
Erica R Maier at 2012-12-21 16:34:02:
An old Texas house is discovered as the unlikely criminal in the mystery of a dying family's missing year.
Erica R Maier at 2012-12-21 16:48:35:
A century-old bank becomes the shocking backdrop in the mystery of a missing boy and his secret friends.
ChrisWWW at 2012-12-21 16:50:28:
A TEENAGE BOY, STRUGGLING at HIGH SCHOOL, DISCOVERs his FATHER, a SUCCESSFUL BOSS of a large PUBLIC BANK, is having an affair with the WIFE of a CORRUPT GOVERNMENT official, and TOGETHER with THREE of his RUTHLESS STUDENT FRIENDS, DECIDE to PLAN an ULTIMATELY DANGEROUS and SHOCKING DEAL, in EXCHANGE for keeping their LOVE a SECRET. (apologies if I have posted this already. Unforunately my first logline isn't showing when I log in)
Erica R Maier at 2012-12-21 17:03:49:
A century-old bank becomes the shocking backdrop in the mystery of a missing boy and his secret family. **Couldn't decide between friends or family for last word, so am throwing both out there**
Noah Thomas Grossman at 2012-12-21 17:23:39:
When a TEENAGE ASTRONAUT DISCOVERS her biological FATHER is a sex SLAVE on a CRIMINAL planet, she hires a DYING SHERIFF and an EX-CON to help fight a CORRUPT GOVERNMENT and RUTHLESS prison POPULATION to SAVE her only FAMILY.
jbwilke at 2012-12-21 17:29:48:
When ROSS, an AMERICAN EXCHANGE STUDENT, DISCOVERS a SHOCKING GOVERNMENT CONSPIRACY to PROTECT HITLER'S SECRET DAUGHTER, he MUST TEAM up with an EX-CON FORMER ASTRONAUT to SAVE his HOME TOWN.
Shaula Evans at 2012-12-21 17:39:25:
When a big city PUBLIC HIGH SCHOOL TEACHER transfers to a small TEXAS TOWN to care for her DYING MOTHER, she finds the CORRUPT local GOVERNMENT is siphoning money out of her NEW SCHOOL. She sets out to SAVE the SCHOOL the only way she knows how: one DRUG-laced bake sale at a TIME--but her PLANS go AWRY when the handsome SINGLE FATHER of one of her STUDENTS, the local SHERIFF, DECIDES he wants her for his NEW WIFE.
jbwilke at 2012-12-21 17:55:11:
When his TEENAGE DAUGHTER goes MISSING, a YOUNG FATHER must TEAM up with a RUTHLESS DRUG LORD to FIND her before she is FORCED to BECOME a sex SLAVE in TEXAS.
plinytheelder_t at 2012-12-21 18:27:46:
Alone on a journey after leaving her astronaut boyfriend, a woman is mistaken for a missing criminal's wife with a dangerous secret. Pursued by corrupt cops, she discovers the woman hiding in a small town, and now the two must uncover the mystery of the government man who wants them dead.
ChrisWWW at 2012-12-21 18:33:48:
Just a quick note that may be useful... An important point to note maybe the time when each of the most interesting original loglines are posted. Otherwise, there may be a trend where some people can just take the best points of each of the previous loglines, or the best previously matched words of previous loglines, then just mix and match them together as a logline and cast it off as their own, when instead they may have just taken other people's ideas... Just thought it could be a point worth mentioning
ChrisWWW at 2012-12-21 18:34:13:
Just a quick note... An important point to note maybe the time when each of the most interesting original loglines are posted. Otherwise, there may be a trend where some people can just take the best points of each of the previous loglines, or the best previous matched words of each of the loglines previously posted, then just mix and match them together as a logline and cast it off as their own, when instead they may have just taken other people's ideas... Just thought it could be a point worth mentioning.
Beckie Tye Lombardi at 2012-12-21 18:41:26:
“Losing Sam” An elderly patient with dementia escapes from his nursing home and mistakes a young woman for his dead daughter, forcing her to drive him cross country back to his childhood home. Along the way they discover that sometimes the only way to learn who you really are is to forget everything you ever knew.
Shaula Evans at 2012-12-21 18:41:28:
When a sheriff takes up a new post in a retirement village for ex-cons, she's determined to discover the secrets of their criminal past, starting with her father--and he's just as determined to run her out of town.
EKNscript at 2012-12-21 18:43:43:
Following suspicions about the sheriff's missing daughter, a young man's criminal secret is unravelled when he goes to war with the government, in a ruthless conspiracy of three friends, to protect his reputation in a small town.
plinytheelder_t at 2012-12-21 18:44:54:
A dying high school student and his girlfriend have had sex in every public building of a small town except one. When they break in to the bank to bring a dangerous but successful conclusion to the list, their plan goes awry as they discover her escaped criminal brother already inside and must help him search for a box containing the shocking secret that will free him.
EKNscript at 2012-12-21 18:47:39:
A young, corrupt astronaut and ex-con violate the new law and order, launching a ruthless time machine which leaves a woman stuck in a shocking 15th century conspiracy, as Texas cops search for one family secret that will unwind the mystery.
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 18:47:44:
That may be possible, and it's certainly a valid concern. But I think, too, that there are a limited number of available words for us to work with. And even among the 100-ish(?) words, there are only so many adjectives and nouns - even fewer that will make sense together. So I think there are bound to be tons of overlapping ideas. A lot of it is probably unavoidable. :/
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 18:49:04:
Shaula, I love this one!
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 18:49:36:
This is really good as well.
jfallaire at 2012-12-21 18:50:29:
In order to stop the future war, Sam sends his wife back to take Hitler's virginity.
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 18:52:41:
Love this one, too, Noah! You actually hooked me with "hires a dying sheriff". I'm not sure why, but that really struck me.
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 18:54:03:
Ha!
plinytheelder_t at 2012-12-21 19:09:11:
Was it Stravinsky, Picasso or Steve jobs who said that the good borrow and the great steal? I bet none of them had to deal with aspiring screenwriters :)
Beckie Tye Lombardi at 2012-12-21 19:10:00:
“Dug Up” Two young boys decide to fake their own death in order to escape the village bully only to accidentally uncover the shocking truth behind a decade old murder. “Village Idiots” Six ex-cons pull the job of a lifetime when they convince a tiny village to elect them to the local council. All is well until a drug war breaks out and the group suddenly find themselves in unfamiliar territory as they are faced with enforcing the laws they love to break. “The Third” Population control takes a dark turn when a sinister government imposes a law requiring violators of the “two child” rule to kill their unauthorized progeny. Sam, one of the most ruthless enforcers, finds himself on the other side of the law when he discovers his wife is pregnant with triplet. They go on the run, desperate to reach safety before being caught by the very people he helped train.
plinytheelder_t at 2012-12-21 19:12:14:
Not what I meant, which is that the difference in activity between here and the workshop is correctly attributed to the "constructive bribery" of a free Black List read. That's all.
Cheryl Laughlin at 2012-12-21 19:15:29:
NICK AND DICK’S VIRGINITY WAR – Two high school teenagers start a ruthless, eponymous virginity war to win the love of the small-town, straight-laced astronaut girl. (Now that was some delicious fun... thanks, Blacklist!)
Shaula Evans at 2012-12-21 19:29:20:
Ah, yes. Agreed! Bribery does wonders. This thread is just a wee bit longer than the original, isn't it. And yet, with a 'real' logline, the incentive factor ought to be the greater probability of selling the script if you do a better job of the logline. It's fascinating (to me) when people workshop their loglines to see how much better the end result gets.
SaradeWaard1 at 2012-12-21 19:32:56:
When his struggling daughter’s public high school teachers go work-to-rule for the year, an ex-con, single-father crosses the picket line, desperate to make stars out of the losing junior debate team from the ghetto. 17 words :)
plinytheelder_t at 2012-12-21 19:33:15:
An alien lands in a small Texas farm and tells an unlikely but shocking story that soon attracts the population from all around. When a dying former astronaut goes to listen, the alien offers him new life and a journey to a distant star in exchange for robbing three boxes from a secret government building.
Shaula Evans at 2012-12-21 19:45:50:
When three teenage black girls desperate to escape the abuse of a small Texas town's corrupt first family murder their employers, they find it's shockingly easy to carry on as usual while the oldest girl's boyfriend the sheriff looks the other way, but when the sheriff falls in love with a new girl, they're forced to consider a new murder.
LaurieAshbourne at 2012-12-21 20:07:38:
An escaped slave discovers a missing young family and is forced to choose between his freedom and their life.
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 20:30:55:
Excellent! I'd like to know a little more about the family, such as why they are missing and why they need his help), but I really like this one!
Shaula Evans at 2012-12-21 20:35:44:
When the Lord sends his daughter to earth as the new messiah, she assembles a ragtag group of 12 ex-cons, drug addicts, and single mothers to preach the new gospel of love as a funk band, but when a desperate and frightened government tries to shut her down by corrupting her team with corporate sponsorships, it looks like the whole plan might go awry before they can release a single single--or save a single soul.
DemiNguyen at 2012-12-21 20:58:36:
Struggling young sheriff, following ruthless ex-con drug boss, discovers corrupt cops behind shocking government murder conspiracy.
AmyRButler at 2012-12-21 21:02:21:
This was such a great idea! I really enjoyed doing this. Here are my loglines (so far): As part of a team observing one of the last isolated villages in the world, a junior scientist begins to notice strange and unnatural phenomenon, forcing her to figure out if there’s a government conspiracy to experiment on the unassuming villagers – or if the villagers’ gods have finally come out of the dark. As an old husband and wife come close to breaking the record for longest marriage, the media frenzy and family pressure surrounding their anniversary party begins to reveal the cracks and fissures in their relationship, exposing century-old secrets, and ultimately threatening to destroy the last dearly-held American myth – all you need is love. In a secret government training school, three friends discover that their “American” mentors may be hiding a devastating conspiracy – one they may be unwilling accomplices in. When an astronaut dies in a botched shuttle launch, he discovers his ghost can travel through time, leading him to discover the shuttle explosion was no accident and spurring him to try to stop the conspiracy before his death happens all over again. Good luck to all!
Christine Orlando at 2012-12-21 21:06:53:
When a corrupt school official labels their daughter a threat, can a family expose a shocking conspiracy before the government sends her to a slave farm for dangerous teens?
Kristen Mozaffari at 2012-12-21 21:08:33:
I was going to stop commenting, but wow - those are awesome, Amy! I love them all, but 2 and 4 are my favorites. Good job!
Natty Light at 2012-12-21 21:10:24:
A desperate mob boss must protect a struggling drug lord as the "family business" goes awry... Adolf Hitler. A true American journey.
Shaula Evans at 2012-12-21 21:22:08:
(I'm hoping we get 100 entries before the deadline...) When a Catholic Father discovers his corrupt church is part of a vampire conspiracy to farm boys and girls for blood, he must track down the missing cardinal who knows the secret of how to murder vampires--but the dying old man has other plans. (For Scott. Obviously.)
Natty Light at 2012-12-21 21:41:17:
Ex-Con Sam Written begins an unlikely new life. Family, love... and virginity.
BrowneTom at 2012-12-21 21:59:09:
A struggling, desperate, single, teenage student, Sam Boss, finally loses his virginity to a dangerous, English, teenage ex-con, but will he find true love?
TheQuietAct at 2012-12-21 22:03:35:
Really like "The Third" Beckie and as for LOSING SAM, awwh! I'm welling up already.
AmyRButler at 2012-12-21 22:07:34:
Thanks, Kristen! I'm usually no fan of loglines, but this turned out to be really fun!
Beckie Tye Lombardi at 2012-12-21 22:12:00:
“The Secret Year” Cast out by her religiously devout Texas family following an unplanned pregnancy, Annalisa is sent to live with relatives in a tiny village in Ireland until the child is born, discovering there an unlikely friend and ally in Killian, a young boy who wants nothing more than to be a beauty queen.
travislambirth at 2012-12-21 22:14:18:
Government astronaut Texas "Tex" Young travels into a future town of Ghetto Ex-Conn 3 where Americans are run by Black Star, The Lord of Death, and his ruthless Night Sheriffs. Tex meets Sam Robbing, whose teenage daughter Sam was forced into slavery by their village in exchange for a new drug called "love" that Black Star uses to corrupt the population, and together they journey to Night Town to search for Sam. In Night Town they discover Black Star's dangerous Death Box and a secret slave conspiracy to murder Black Star that ultimately begins a war.
travislambirth at 2012-12-21 22:16:25:
Tex meets Ross Robbing**
plinytheelder_t at 2012-12-21 22:18:14:
Three young students spend a year in junior astronaut school, banding together to carve out a great future, only to struggle to save their friendship when the government selects just one of them for a dangerous mission to be the first teenage girl sent into space.
Lane Heymont at 2012-12-21 22:22:47:
Three teenage friends must protect time when they discover a government conspiracy to stop the future.
plinytheelder_t at 2012-12-21 22:33:37:
Desperate to escape Death Row, a criminal wanted for murder cons the population of a small North Texas town to form its own government when he discovers the shocking secret that the town was not included in the Louisiana Purchase and is still French.
Pj McIlvaine at 2012-12-21 22:48:04:
Following three teenage friends to Texas in search of the black astronaut accused of robbing their dying ex-con brother, an English exchange student discovers a shocking government conspiracy to protect the former girlfriend of a man whose sudden death forced his father to murder the corrupt town sheriff, and teaches a desperate woman the secret of successful love -- a true American journey in which he ultimately finds friendship and family are the backdrop against which his old criminal life is struggling to escape. Based on a true story.
churnage at 2012-12-21 23:07:30:
One more before the closing bell... When Hitler escapes into the future to start a new race war, the American government sends a ruthless astronaut, along with a former slave, a farm girl and a corrupt sheriff, on a desperate journey through time to save the population and murder the world's most dangerous criminal.
TheQuietAct at 2012-12-21 23:15:44:
Citizen of the World An old woman, acting as a teenager online trying to lose her virginity, becomes a star in her English village. This Family is Criminal! A young woman, struggling with losing her family, sets about building a new one, from unlikely ex-cons.
Teddy Pasternak at 2012-12-21 23:23:09:
Three American exchange students in Switzerland accidentally discover that the former Führer is alive and hiding in a remote village in the Alps. To get the Nazi gold he has stolen and locked in a secure vault, they must TAKE HITLER TO THE BANK.
Teddy Pasternak at 2012-12-21 23:33:28:
"This Family is Criminal!" I love that title!
Teddy Pasternak at 2012-12-21 23:36:25:
APOLLO TEENS
Shaula Evans at 2012-12-22 00:29:27:
Ha! It's sort of Harper Valley PTA meets Saving Grace (2000).
RealLizGaribay at 2012-12-22 00:38:19:
A young American man discovers his English ex-con girlfriend is involved in a government conspiracy that will shockingly take him back in time to his teenage years and divulge the truth about losing his virginity that will ultimately reshape the very existence of his then young Texas family.
Christina Ferguson at 2012-12-22 00:59:44:
DADDY ISSUES A struggling young star must go back to West Texas and protect her desperate ex-con father from a ruthless drug lord, or risk losing him for good.
williammichaelt at 2012-12-22 01:02:34:
Sam, a single father discovers a ruthless ex-con escaped a bank robbery and now his young son is missing. In his search for his son he discovers the Sheriff is working with the government in a shocking drug conspiracy. His new girlfriend is the unlikely star in his plan to save his son and ultimately the American way of life.
williammichaelt at 2012-12-22 01:04:29:
So good!
Shaula Evans at 2012-12-22 01:20:46:
As we tick toward the deadline, I just wanted to say thanks, Scott, and Leonard. This has been a blast. > On a whim yesterday, I posted this: And Scott--more acting on whims, please! What a lot of fun.
Shaula Evans at 2012-12-22 01:38:14:
Three high school friends--the football team captain, an English exchange student, and a farm boy desperate to lose his virginity--post a plan on on an Internet forum for robbing their small town bank, but when the money really goes missing and the sheriff comes after them, they have one day to find and return the money before the real criminals get away.
plinytheelder_t at 2012-12-22 01:42:17:
A Man in Black must team up with a former astronaut and an ex-con to save Earth's population when a government conspiracy goes awry and a message of friendship is mistaken for a declaration of war.
screamtweets at 2012-12-22 01:58:07:
Wow! There were only a few dozen entries yesterday. I came up with three: 1) Set in the future, a family’s journey from a dying star, and search for a new home. 2) A dying man makes a deal with Death for one more day with his family. 3) When an escaped criminal from the future is mistaken for the new town sheriff, he becomes the law and discovers a shocking murder mystery. Good luck!
jeremynt at 2012-12-22 02:00:37:
A woman discovers a government conspiracy to hide a missing astronaut in a secret space house as bait for alien life. A desperate search team is deployed only to find the mission was a success -- but now the bait is for us.
plinytheelder_t at 2012-12-22 02:29:41:
A teenage girl is mistaken by Death for an old woman with the same name. Now, as he tries to set things straight, she has one night to teach him the value of family and an unlikely friendship in exchange for a new life of mystery.
Shaula Evans at 2012-12-22 02:59:38:
You are a logline machine, Pliny! When an ex-con rap star falls in love with the daughter of a Texas evangelical, reinvents himself as a gospel singer and takes a born-again virginity pledge, it's written off as a publicity stunt by the American music press, but when a rival artist traps him on an island with three sexy single women, his resolve and his love are put to the test.
Nicholas Raddick at 2012-12-22 03:02:18:
Very Tarantino of you. In a thread full of similar loglines, this one definitely stands out... for better or worse. On a more personal note, I'm not sure if I want you as a roommate anymore!
plinytheelder_t at 2012-12-22 03:14:25:
I bow humbly to your own skills in that regard.
plinytheelder_t at 2012-12-22 03:16:14:
Harry Potter meets The Right Stuff.
TheQuietAct at 2012-12-22 08:58:44:
Cheers Teddy and kudos on getting in there on numero 100 AND with a good storyline. Touché mon frère.
Of Traveling and Direction | the Unsolicited Memoirs of an Infrangible Writer at 2012-12-22 10:54:20:
[...] of ideas that excite me, I made up a couple loglines in response to Scott Myer’s Black List word cloud challenge. I normally hate loglines, but this exercise was actually a lot of fun. And I don’t have any [...]
Y S Brown at 2012-12-22 12:00:59:
FATHER GOES TO WAR ONE EPONYMOUS TEXAS SHERIFF STRUGGLING to PROTECT his YOUNG DAUGHTER's VIRGINITY from her DANGEROUS, TEENAGE, EX-CON BOYFRIEND, JUNIOR, begins to SUDDENLY DISCOVER THAT HE can't STOP FIRST LOVE and the LAW MAN ULTIMATELY DECIDES THAT THE SECRET to his NEW BEST LIFE NOW IS THREE THINGS: HIS PARTY WIFE SAM, HIS TWO RUTHLESS VILLAGE FRIENDS, ROSS AND ENGLISH AND A SINGLE FARM BOX BUILDING IN TOWN THAT HE CAN RUN TO AND GO GET REALLY HIGH. AN UNLIKELY SELF-JOURNEY WRITTEN BY A WOMAN
plinytheelder_t at 2012-12-22 13:05:09:
if we're doing after the wire edits... "A party girl is mistaken...."
Shaula Evans at 2012-12-22 13:53:24:
> We may have to put on our thinking caps to come up with other variations on this as it’s a great exercise to get everyone thinking creatively and work with loglines, both critical for a screenwriter. Oh, yes please. Consider my thinking cap on. In fact, even before I looked at GITS this morning, my husband and I were talking about how we could generate word lists to go on playing on our own.
2012 Blacklist Logline Competition | The Bat in the Hat at 2012-12-24 02:10:20:
[...] Anyhoo, this year, they created a tag cloud of some of the most commonly used words in the tag lines for these scripts and, apparently on a whim, challenged people to come up with script loglines using those words as inspiration (both here and here). [...]